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Old 04-16-2008, 01:32 AM   #4
Saywells
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i can tell you're making progress, chris. i feel that you're composing things a bit better now. i'm gonna try to be as constructive as i can, because i know you're new. hopefully i'm not too tough on you, but you are asking for criticism. but some things you need to work on:
-what's the method to your color palettes? on the first one the colors are way too jarring. my eyes are almost diverted instantly. or rather, its neon-ness and disjunct presentation of the colors (those jagged shapes in the back) make it difficult to digest the poster and its content. on the second one, it's almost the opposite. since there are so many instances of the colors and similar vibrancy make me kind of gloss over it.

-the typography at the bottom of the first one seems uninspired. the typeface, the orientation and spacing... just looks slapped together and added after the fact.

-what do you want people to look at first? what should be catching their eye? in the first, the vibrant colors take away from the skater, who i didn't even notice at first. he kind of seems unrelated, stuck in mid air doing nothing. especially with the shadow behind him, it seems like he's heading outward, not upward. or sitting on his ass with his feet in the air....

-if you are to cut pieces out of photos, be sure to take care in blending him in. i see tons of pixels around the skater of the background of the photo you snagged him from. what dpi are you working in? are these to be printed?

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