"Too much of a good thing, is simply wonderful"
-Don't remember who said it
First of all, the font doesn't fit, neither the typeface, placement or color.
Also, your composition lacks one very fundemental thing: contrast. It's just a blur of objects with blending modes, and the composition ends up very bright and messy. Try to obtain more contrast and you can see that you can put endless of mess and crap into a picture and it can (can, not will) look good
