designerbrett

jinxjg21- Thanks im glad to hear that. I havent been very good with typography so i really work on this one.

chris- thanks for the crit, i have uploaded a new image for you to examine. Have fun and be hard on me.

stereopattern- thanks for the comments i can see what you mean by the oil person, though i like how he turned out, it has a really cool style to it, the problem that i have is using that through out the design. And i fixed some of the stuff that you suggested.

Roski- thanks, im working on fixing how they look.

So I am really thankful for all the comments and what not that you all have said so far. So thanks.

Here is a link to the poster but much much bigger.
Us to let you know there is still work to do, http://brettandersonart.mapsformoder....com/ad_v2.jpg

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alyCe

I love the concept, which is the most important part, the technical is just, well, the technical side

but on the tehnical side, a few minor notes: I think you should have the outlines bolder. Especially on the car, it looks... "weak" (in lack of a better word), and a car is in fact a huge, heavy, load, roaring thing

And oh, as far as I can see, the oilyman's right foot is facing in the wrong direction?


But most importantly, I think you're typography is a bit too messy and all over the place. Think about it, in a text, you use bold to put extra weight on something. I like the grunged out font on "oil" (although you should look at kerning them closer together), and I see why you've chosen helvetica for Corporations, but for the third font you've chosen a serif-font that looks very "pretty". It kinds of clashes with the theme. And the font on advantage is too light for what it's trying to say imo.

I love the way you handle this, and I love the concept. It's nice to see 'political' design, not just comercial. Try to listen to all the critique listed here, rethink even harder what fonts say, and what their forms and appearances emphasis their message and you'll get a great piece of design

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designerbrett

thanks for the advice and everything. So here are some changes and all. Changed the font for advantage and thickened the stroke on the car and gas station.

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phahn77

One thing I would say about it is that it is a bit of see/say. If we see the oil corp guy stealing out of avg joe's pocket, we as viewers, can make that connection without you having to tell us that the oil co's are taking advantage of us. A little too much hand holding.
Maybe you can explore the imagery a little more and find a more subtle way of expressing how the oil companies are stealing from consumers. Oil prices affect people in different ways and on various social levels.

I like the way you're experimenting with type and the changes you've made make it easier to read. Just for fun, maybe you could make this a type based piece with no imagery, but still try to convey the concept of stealing, only through type.

Just some thoughts, nice work.

designerbrett

Alright i took myself away from this project and now im back to finish it. So i want to have give you guys another opportunity to critic it and after this im done. haha so i added the background just to give it some depth, i live the feel that a poster gives you when it takes to back in space or looks like there is more in the background. So tell me what you think and we'll see what happens from there. thanks.

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alyCe

The image is perfect, but I'd spend a bit more time with the type. How about an exclamation mark instead of a punctuation mark.
and is there any deeper meaning about the hugly C? It hugs the O very tightly compared to the rest of the letters in the word. My feelings on the typefaces you've used:
the serif you've used on "the, are, taking, of us": Very good, kind of newspaper'ish.
the one for "OIL": too much, would be better if you used a regular strong font (maybe a slab serif, or a sans) and grunged/fucked it up yourself. The O is nice but the i and the L is too different in weight and look.
The one in "Corporation": The most apropriate by far, Helvetica (or is it some insanely same-looking twin?) is a very industrial, cold, non-humane typeface and especially with the heavy weight it says excatcly what you want it to say.
The one in "advantage": Looks very light, elegant and friendly, it can work in a ironic way but I think you should experiment with a more "mean-looking" font.

My two cents at least

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Staur

The 2# picture is waaay better, but I still think you sould do something about his feets, they are to pointy, this is not a big issue but something to look in to.
I would like to see a BIG suv insted of the bmw i must say.
but great works I realy like the 2# one.

peace

MediaMisfit

I would go with fewer elements. I like the drip but in the end just stop and think about your message and then choose like three peaces to express it in.

Here's 15 min of design since I thought this would be fun. I thought of some more stuff by it would take me forever to vector a gas pump on a baby bottle.

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lewis

MediaMisfit that post actually made me 'LOL'!
Love the main design on the right, reminiscent (in my mind anyway) of the Otep video for 'Warhead'

(Apologies for the badly sourced screen cap)