A good saying

Staur · 03-04-2008, 06:52 AM

Hi folks

I had some time to spare, so I made this for fun, it's a old Norwegian saying. hope you like it.

peace

Saywells · 03-04-2008, 02:24 PM

hey Staur
i like it, though you have a typo: "exquisite"

Aarlev · 03-04-2008, 02:34 PM

I love the illustration but I'm not sure about the typography. Maybe try another font and place the text differently?

alyCe · 03-04-2008, 02:35 PM

Urm, it's all nice vector, but I just don't "feel it"
(oh, and by the way I'm probably gonna be widely hated for my critiques aren't I?)
It just lacks SOMETHING that gives a feel of the saying, I'm not feeling "alone" - I'm not feeling "drinking" - I'm feeling a vector-sun, a vector-beer and a vector-tableish thing. Some questions then, for you and me:

-What do you want to communicate with this?
-What choices did you make to communicate this?
-Why have you chosen the font you've used?

I suspect this isn't something you've thought properly through, but if you think about this and, if you want, make some changes it'll probably be a good exercise. And as you've put it in this section I guess you do want feedback =)

edit: darn!! This was in the showcase-phorum. Ohwell, if this is something you made just to pass time, and don't bother fixing/reflecting upon then ignore my post

Staur · 03-04-2008, 02:36 PM

Hi Saywells

thanks, good looking out. we cant have any typo

peace

Staur · 03-04-2008, 02:50 PM

you dident feel much alyCe :P
I do appreciate your feed back, I was really just wanted to make some kind of illustration to the saying. I tried to do this illustration some years ago, but it didnt turn out as well as I wanted.
I get what you are saying about the not feeling it, sometimes you just dont but I appreciate that you gave reasons for it.
I can see that your not feeling alone when you are looking at it.
I did this design just because I had some extra time on my hand. it's not a school assiment,
and no I havent thought much over the typo, just kinda liked it.
but as you said it's a good exercise, and if I got some time on my hand I will try and make some changes and will see.
No hard feelings

peace

Staur · 03-04-2008, 05:24 PM

Hi

I didnt want to do my history homework

do you guys thinks it's better??

peace

alyCe · 03-05-2008, 01:51 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Staur

do you guys thinks it's better??

humm.... erm... YES!

It is 1,000,000,000,000 times better, it's great now, unlike the first, now I do feel it, I feel the contrast between the neon sign and the writings on the wall.... its great!! Still some nitpicking technical things like his hand looks a bit wierd, but honestly, I don't care. That is an amazing transition from the first to the second

You make me so proud

Gino · 03-05-2008, 02:07 AM

Yeah much better this one has a lot more feeling to it.

Staur · 03-05-2008, 03:41 AM

Yess I know the hand was pretty tricky to make, I tried many differnent hands but this one was the less sucky. thanks for the guidens

peace

03-04-2008, 02:34 PM	#3
Aarlev Web Designer Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: London Posts: 343	I love the illustration but I'm not sure about the typography. Maybe try another font and place the text differently? __________________ //PORTFOLIO\\

03-04-2008, 02:35 PM	#4
alyCe Super Moderator Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: Norway Posts: 693	Urm, it's all nice vector, but I just don't "feel it" (oh, and by the way I'm probably gonna be widely hated for my critiques aren't I?) It just lacks SOMETHING that gives a feel of the saying, I'm not feeling "alone" - I'm not feeling "drinking" - I'm feeling a vector-sun, a vector-beer and a vector-tableish thing. Some questions then, for you and me: -What do you want to communicate with this? -What choices did you make to communicate this? -Why have you chosen the font you've used? I suspect this isn't something you've thought properly through, but if you think about this and, if you want, make some changes it'll probably be a good exercise. And as you've put it in this section I guess you do want feedback =) edit: darn!! This was in the showcase-phorum. Ohwell, if this is something you made just to pass time, and don't bother fixing/reflecting upon then ignore my post __________________ everyone runs, nobody hides

03-05-2008, 02:07 AM	#9
Gino Administrator/Founder Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: NYC Posts: 1,036	Yeah much better this one has a lot more feeling to it. __________________ Free Business Cards // T Shirts Blog // How to Start A Clothing Line

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03-04-2008, 02:24 PM	#2
Saywells on Main Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 101	hey Staur i like it, though you have a typo: "exquisite"

03-04-2008, 02:50 PM	#6
Staur Senior Designer Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Norway Posts: 255	you dident feel much alyCe :P I do appreciate your feed back, I was really just wanted to make some kind of illustration to the saying. I tried to do this illustration some years ago, but it didnt turn out as well as I wanted. I get what you are saying about the not feeling it, sometimes you just dont but I appreciate that you gave reasons for it. I can see that your not feeling alone when you are looking at it. I did this design just because I had some extra time on my hand. it's not a school assiment, and no I havent thought much over the typo, just kinda liked it. but as you said it's a good exercise, and if I got some time on my hand I will try and make some changes and will see. No hard feelings peace

03-05-2008, 03:41 AM	#10
Staur Senior Designer Join Date: Feb 2008 Location: Norway Posts: 255	Yess I know the hand was pretty tricky to make, I tried many differnent hands but this one was the less sucky. thanks for the guidens peace